Cassus Animus

First, seperate the lines from the header, example will be given at the end of this. Second off, your chorus is entirely too long and it drowns out the rest ...

I miss the 90's, good music, awesome TV shows, amazing movies...and so many things to do aside from sit on the PC...now days we could get arrested for some terrorist ...

First the added bold words detract from the writing (just a personal quirk), it is hard to focus on the writing itself when every verse has this bolded font hanging ...

The 'river' is life, in that I mean water...without water we would perish. The subject is God, and questioning the existence when all that it has left is nothing. The ...

'Thee' is intentional and I know it means you, I agree the chorus has a lot of repetition and I can't quite find the words to use to put it ...

Look at how hard I tried, seeing everyday how you pry. Shadows creep the walls with what if's, the blood on my fist settles this end. Tapering the strings attached ...

Looks a lot nicer and more organized now, easier to read this way (if someone were to listen to it, it would be a different story but as writing goes ...

First verse solid, second verse caught me off with 'shove your ring' for some reason that line doesn't click with the rest of the verse for me. The chorus is ...

Well after my last site was shut down I was on the prowl for another poetry site to post at...however I had to go through a number of duds (I'm ...

Google...not bad though, went through about a dozen before settling on this one.

You're good at math too, eh?

Aye, I'm new...give me some time. :P

Could be organized better, the first two verses can be split and used later in the lyric specifically the second one. The chorus is a bit lengthy, typically you want ...

The first verse is solid, however I think it could do with some more length. The chorus threw me off because as I read I fell into 'chorus you are ...

Well good to see no one caught on to the meaning, as well I know my meter is mush at times and I don't tend to follow one I just ...